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Dreamcatcher by ~fourdaysfromnow:iconfourdaysfromnow:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Transgressive > Open




Restless, as seen in your dreams.
My arms are heavy with depression, my long fight is over.
I want to wake up now, I want to wake up.
In a place where my head is free to explore,
a place where you are perfect...
In my dreams destiny follows destruction,
but when I wake up you're not really there next to me.
Collapse, relapse, recover, discover, everything inside of you...
Blow me away beautiful.
Everything is gone now and you're not here.
Kill this fear that lurks in my dreams.
Princess of the Kingdom of Cults, you amaze me.
You are the one who trespasses into my dreamland,
and causes me so much pain.
Yeah, put that chrome dreamcatcher to my chest,
and silently blow me away.
©2005-2010 ~fourdaysfromnow
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Any comments/opinions/criticism appreciated :)

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~Atheleas Aug 17, 2005, 12:20:21 PM
Awww, this is simply beautiful. There's just something about it. I'm not sure how to explain...so I won't. ;)

I love this part-

"Everything is gone now and you're not here.
Kill this fear that lurks in my dreams.
Princess of the Kingdom of Cults, you amaze me.
You are the one who trespasses into my dreamland,
and causes me so much pain."

A large part I know. I just love the contrast in feeling- I think that would be called a juxtaposition- I should pay more attention in English. :P Good job, you left me with hardly anything to say. (Luckily enough for you)

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~fourdaysfromnow Aug 17, 2005, 12:41:32 PM
Thank you for taking the time to read :)

juxtaposition? dun know what that means! haha

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~TechnoKiken Aug 17, 2005, 4:42:45 PM
This piece is powerful, full of emotion and energy. Kinda like beauty wrapped in barbed wire.

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Go and errr......kill ur self.............quietly
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~fourdaysfromnow Aug 17, 2005, 4:56:55 PM
Thank you for your kind words :)

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~contritedevil Aug 17, 2005, 9:17:26 PM
this manages to have its own pull it grabs right under your ribcage

i felt myself slow down when i read it

everyone should love this for its familiarity


intense

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contrite
devil

...she tells me im a pretty bullet....
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~fourdaysfromnow Aug 17, 2005, 9:51:05 PM
thanks for taking the time to read it! I appreciate your comments

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*Sapphire911 Aug 17, 2005, 10:58:52 PM
Wow hun. I think m heart skipped a beat reading this.

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Reality can be beaten with enough imagination.
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~Atheleas Aug 18, 2005, 3:53:39 AM
Hehe no problem, like I've said coutless times- I actually like reading your poems.

Hmmm...let me see- Juxtaposition:I think it would be two contrasting emotions put together side by side. So basically to emotions like love and hate put together in the same poem. Which means it wasn't an oxymoron which is the similar Heehee. So I did use it in the right context. :D Wow...that was one helluva boring fact. ;)

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~fourdaysfromnow Aug 18, 2005, 12:09:32 PM
Thank you for your comment :)


how are you?

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